Can someone who is good at writing and fixing essays look over my essay and fix it. Thank you

Hi! lovely essay, it looks pretty good to me just make sure u have great punctuation a periods etc. and make sure don't drag it out when u mean something dig deep don't wait so make sure if it's unnecessary take it out one thing teachers don't like are long essays i learn myself

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Hello! I really do like your paragraph, the only advice I would give you is don’t make everything comas (not saying you were) and make sure to add proper punctuation. And you should be great. And make sure to capitalize things that need to be capitalized.

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