Review my poem! all i need is for someone to check the grammar and review it for me.
oh do come with me
to the land of make believe
across the roaring rivers
through the whispering winds
and pass the ferocious beasts
dream it and you will see it
want it and in your hand it appears
for the land of make believe
has all you could ever dream of
boom, bang, and bash!
the sound of the cannons fire
flutter, flish, and flash,
the sound of the fairy's wings surround you
the magic door appears
find your key!
though as most things do
there is a lock
for to get through the magic door
a child like imagination is required
deep down inside find yours,
and the key will be forever be in your hands!

Oh,* do please come with me
To the land of make believe
Across the roaring rivers
Through the whispering winds
and past* the ferocious beasts
Dream it and you will see it
Want it and in your hand it appears
For the land of make believe
has all you could ever dream of
Boom, Bang, and Bash!
The sound of the cannons fire
Flutter, Flish, and Flash,
The sound of the fairy's wings surround you
The magic door appears
Find your key!
Though as most things do
There is a lock
For to get through the magic door
A child like imagination is required
Deep down inside find yours,
and the key will be forever be in your hands!
Edits have been made! It's perfect! Hope this helps!! :)

I think it was improvident of him not to set aside a part of his earning for a rainy day.